13.4.14.
Momina Arif
18/06/2016
His reins will tighten right around your neck
His eyes will falter in all the damned ways
You’ll tremble in a great fear
and then he’ll fade away
His eyes will falter in all the damned ways
You’ll tremble in a great fear
and then he’ll fade away
His madness will rage like funeral rites
Not long and he’ll be raised like transparent kites
He won’t come back you know
In all of your lifetimes, that day it’ll snow
Not long and he’ll be raised like transparent kites
He won’t come back you know
In all of your lifetimes, that day it’ll snow
His army of headless men, they’ll sit on a pyre and pray
Go on then, may you have your say
One day this castle will touch down in its ruthless glory
The mad man will have his pride
But we will have a story.
Go on then, may you have your say
One day this castle will touch down in its ruthless glory
The mad man will have his pride
But we will have a story.
I really enjoyed your poem. Well written!
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Beautifully written. So much emotion. Very powerful!
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Very interesting. Reminded me of “Game of Thrones”.
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Very nice… beautiful poem… albeit sad.
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Lovely poem.
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Love the drawing of the castle. It fits the poem so well
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very nice poem, out of treachery always comes a good story!
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You did a great job with the poem. So powerful.
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This is solid. I love a good poem. I love the story and imagry here.
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You took me to another time entirely! Powerful story. I can just imagine the plight
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What a powerful piece, Momina! Very thought-provoking!
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Beautifully written. Thanks for sharing
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Oh dear! Interesting poem.
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Wow! These words are so powerfull! I love it!
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Pretty dark poem. Visions of he who should not be named and other scary villains come to mind.
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Honestly, I’m not sure what to say about this other than It makes me sad. Is that the intention?
Such a sad poem. A little hard to analysis… But that is what is fun part of reading poems.
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This is such a beautiful piece of writing. Even though it is about sorrow, your words touched me to the point of a smile.
Thank you so much, that is very kind of you
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definitely very fitting for what is happening in the world today.
Thank you so much. It is interesting for you to see it that way
This is beautiful, I love the way you’ve written it. “One day this castle will touch down in its ruthless glory/This mad man will have his pride/But he will have a story” gave me goosebumps.
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Beautifully composed and really like the illustration. Brings out the depth of this poem. Good job!
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What a great poem, I really love the message. I wish I’m good in writing too
Thank you so much π Honestly just let it all out there nothing more to writing than honestly expressing it
Sounds a little terrifying, power can really change how you view a person. I thought it was a good read though!
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Wow
Short but with such deep emotions!
Really liked it π
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Great poem. You’re very talented!
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Wow! This was intense! -Erin at http://www.stayathomeyogi.com
Thank you so much. I’m glad you liked it π
What a great poem, very well said. Love the sketch drawling as well.
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